What say to the ship called 'Cajun Doll' poem?

by Elysbeth | Posted in Poetry

Coffee-lightning roused. Shower-ozone
Perked. Driving. Windy. Tie.

"Good Afternoon. Bridge okay?"

"Link light out. Lost a ship in the bay
Last night. Coast Safeguard confirmed
'Cajun Doll' split up.

i preference this kind of reading.
it always keeps me glued in.
the first stanza setup is in effect good.
and the end when you took the
experience with you..pretty cool.





What are your comments on the unrehearsed 'Cajun Doll' morning 'just awake' poem?

by Elysbeth | Posted in Poetry

Coffee-lightning conscious. Shower-ozone
Perked. Driving. Windy. Cross over.

'Good Afternoon. Bridge okay? '

'Span portable out. Lost a ship in the bay
Last night. Coast Guard confirmed
'Cajun Doll' split up. Looking for survivors.'

Very well done. In your succinct style you've gotten in a chapter's worth of description and put in the tender of it and drama of it as well.







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